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Final Outcome
Peer Feedback Review
From the Peer Feedback, My responses were all from Film Students which was more useful for acquiring accurate results from people who understand the technicality of making a Short Film.
Question 1
Based on the layout of my site what would you deem the content, themes and style of my project to be? How can you tell this?
Responses I Have Recieved
"I can clearly see its based around cinematography by the stunning visuals on your home page, looks absolutly amazing and pleasing to looks at!"
"The dark lookout of the website works, well with the themes of the film, as the topic the film is about is very dark too."
"Your site looks great. It's simplicity shows a professionality through your style and easy to navigate layout"
"I could easily tell the narrative of the outcome and loved how the theme of your site matched it."
All these responses to this question were great, I received no negative feedback for this one and Answer One stated the dark palette works well as it a dark topic I have explored which is exactly what went through my mind when I was choosing the palette for WIX site. I am really happy Answer Three mentions the ‘simplicity’ of my website, as when looking at Website Inspiration in my Initial Concept Presentation, I stated there that I wanted a minimal website and it shows I successfully achieved this.
Question 2
What specifically did you like about my outcome and why?
Responses I Have Recieved
"The theme. Use of soundtracks, acting, and gorgeous incredible shots are truly giving the feel that you've tried to achieve, giving a slight emotional pain in my heart. I loved how paced the story is. It conveys it's message very well through different varied shots. P.S.(Nice Ukrainian magnet on the fridge! I'm from UA myself!)"
"Okay to pin point one thing is pretty hard because its really good but i'll say the Visuals and colourgrading is great, really enjoyable to look at."
"I liked the music and cinematography, it had a really strong story as well."
"I liked the grading of your film and the camera work"
I was really happy with the feedback I received from this question, an area every person stated they liked was the Cinematography which, as someone who specializes in Cinematography, made me so proud that people liked the area I tried to focus most of my time on. Two people also stated they liked the story and thought it was "strong" which shocked me as creating the narrative had always been an area of Film and TV that I struggled with, so to receive positive feedback on this made me happy with the progress I have made developing narratives this last year.
Question 3
What specifically could I improve in my outcome and why?
Responses I Have Recieved
"I think that in the final scene, during the cam recorder shot, it would look a lot better if you made the quality look worse so that it looks even more like a cam recorder."
"The only thing that you could improve is probably make dialogues a little bit shorter or varied. For example placing more scenes of scenery around during the dialogue."
"This also is super hard to even point out as being a year 1, I personally can not see what could be better or done better it was all really good."
"I had to turn my headphones up to hear some pieces of audio and down to be able to bare other parts."
The first piece of feedback I was given about improving my film is something I am glad someone stated as I would have never picked up on this, now I have realised this issue when I look back at the previous camcorder shot the effect was really overshadowed by the high quailty of my LUMIX Camera. So to fix this, I rendered the clip out zoomed really far away. Then placed the rendered file in my timeline and it zoomed it back in so the clip had been distorted and heavily reduced in quality.
BEFORE PEER FEEDBACK
AFTER PEER FEEDBACK
When it comes to the second and third piece of feedback, there isn’t much I can do to resolve these. The second feedback stated that the dialouge could be improved by making it a little bit shorter however when writing the Script, I felt all the dialouge was necessary to understand what is happening in the narrative and build the emotion between the two main characters.
The last feedback is something I was confused with when I first read it as I have audio checked my film various times and was unable to find anything however, thankfully when reading Question 7, someone else also picked up on this and timestamped the point the audio is mixed poorly where I found this to be true. To resolve this issue from the feedback, I simply turned the audio levels up for one shot as shown in the Church Scene.
BEFORE PEER FEEDBACK
AFTER PEER FEEDBACK
Question 4
Where can you see evidence of my experimentation being used in my final outcome?
Responses I Have Recieved
"You can see very clear use of your experimentaion throughout your film constantly, you can see very great colour grading at all the station scenes and for lighing you can see clear use of it in the hospital scene and the scene at the fridge when Mat tells sarah about his attempt, these are what stood out most to me."
"In the scene where parents talk to a doctor, and in the scene with children playing around (memories scenes) in the end ad in the beginning, there's a clearly an evidence of experimentation with colour grading can be seen."
"The lighting experiment work you have done, I can clearly see in many of your scenes. Like the one where the doctor is telling them the bad news"
"You can see the quality of the lighting in your outcome is high, I assumed lighting experimentation must of been used before even looking"
After reading the feedback I was given for this question it was very obvious that all my Experimentation was clearly shown throughout. As lighting was the practical technique that was heavily making my project complex, I knew I needed to showcase this a lot throughout my Final Outcome and from the peer feedback I have received, it was obvious that people picked up on this. The doctor/hosptial scene was one three people picked out in particular that stood out for them and I did infact use the same one-point lighting setup that I experimented with in my Final Outcome.
Question 5
How could I improve the overall layout and content of my site?
Responses I Have Recieved
"The layout is really good, however a back to top button would be very usful to get back to the top of the page easier"
"It is perfect, I wouldn't improve anything."
"Its pretty perfect ibr"
"Finish the problem solving on the last few weeks, as they are the same atm"
This feedback was something I am proud of as there was absolutely nothing I could reflect on to improve the layout however, I was aware the Problem Solving that needed finishing beforehand and was already in process of finishing this.
Question 6
Do you think the Colour Grading was executed well, and works for the theme of my film?
Responses I Have Recieved
"Absolutely really helps contrast the feel of the film and helps the theme."
"Very, the colour grading matched the mood and story very well."
"The colour grading looks incredible and suits film very well!"
"Yes I think it looks great and fits your theme"
I am glad that all the feedback states the Grading was executed well as someone who also specialises in Colour Grading, I am proud that I am able to achieve these results with an emotion-heavy film. I stated in my Contextual Research Report that ‘without the correct lighting, just like Colour Grading, we may not know what kind of emotion is trying to be conveyed.’ Colour Grading was an essential step of building the emotion in your film and I am glad people believe I have executed this well giving me the impression that the message of my story can be taken seriously by people who can relate.
Question 7
How do you feel about the audio in my film, have I mixed it well, does it sound neat?
Responses I Have Recieved
"The music and sounds all work really well with the theme too, only one audio issue I can pick at and that would be the hospital scene had echoing, but maybe it was intended."
"The audio, music and dialogues sound great! Although where protagonist talks to himself, it would sound better if it was recorded in the studio."
"The audio is mixed well through out the film I would say, however at (5:14) the dialogue is a lot quieter to the rest of that scene"
"Audio was perfect, music matched well with the narrative."
The first feedback stated there was echoing in Hopsital Scene and watching it back I hear what he means however I feel this was just due to the room size and not something that pointed out to me, even as a perfectionist, as sounding terrible and out of place.
The second one stated the protagonist’s voiceovers would’ve sounded better if they were shot in a studio and this is something I could not agree with more. The voiceovers did not sound the best and they were filmed in a small hut making them sound dull and flat. However, I did infact re-record the voiceovers a few days ago but, I felt the original ones sounded better with how the protagonist had said them and I would rather the dialouge have better emotion than the quality sound slightly better, when I believe the ones in place are perfectly listenable.
HUT VOICEOVERS
STUDIO VOICEOVERS
Finally, the third piece of feedback for this question brought me back to the point I was confused on with Question 3 that stated he needed to adjust his headphone level at points in the film due to it being poorly mixed. With this question, it stated the timestamp (5:14) and when listening to it I could clearly tell a noticeable difference between this and it’s surrounding dialouge. I am so glad that he specifically timestamped the poorly mixed sound, as I feel this is something I may have missed when it came to making final amendments. I checked through the audio countless times prior to this and missed this issue.
BEFORE PEER FEEDBACK
AFTER PEER FEEDBACK
Question 8
Did the narrative make sense, or did you get lost at certain points?
Responses I Have Recieved
"Yes it made sense completely from the beginning to the end, but at first I didn't understand what was he trying to do on the station until protagonist jumped under the train, but I think that was a point of it."
"I never really got lost, the story and narrative was clear as day and story was great"
"yes I thought it was and really effective"
"It made perfect sense."
I am glad everyone could understand what was going on in the narrative, this was an element people were heavily confused on in my last FMP, I had many questions of people asking me why he did this, what happened here and it frustrated me a lot. But over the past year, I have clearly developed my storytelling skills a lot and I am proud that I could make a narrative that was stated to not only make sense but to be effective as well, which was the ultimate goal with my film. Creating a film that was effective at helping people who can relate to my protagonist.
Question 9
Do you think the music in my film fits well with the themes and message I am trying to portray?
Responses I Have Recieved
"music fit extremely well, there was moments of silence that felt a bit awkward but apart from that it was sweet."
"Yes, it help push in the feelings more, really worked well."
"Yeah the music works well with the the scenes."
"It fits perfectly into film!"
The music was a detrimental part to my film, I believed beforehand the use of music could really push and support the emotion that was being portrayed and I am glad the second feedback I received stated “it help push in the feelings more”, which is exactly what I was looking to achieve with the music I was using.
They stated in the first feedback that there was moments of silence that felt awkward however, I can’t personally find where this is the case. Nothing in the film felt awkward to me personally and it is ashame that this wasn’t timestamped so I could see what they were talking about, and potentially amend it if I felt the same way too.
The Drafts
The significant change between Draft One and Draft Two was in Draft One towards the end of the film there was a scene where the protagonist, Matt, is talking to his therapist about the night. I decided to cut this scene completely as even only thirty seconds into watching it I became overly bored. There was no tension or suspense it was very bland and I knew for a fact the audience wouldn't want to watch it any longer than I did. I asked my friends for their thoughts and they couldn't agree more. Charlie Hooks stated that 'It was very flat and didn't keep me on the edge of my seat' Which is feedback I couldn't agree with more and why I have decided to cut the scene.
Posters
Changes in my Film
Changed On: 8/4/24 - The change between these two was the complete scene. I didn't like the framing of where Matt was placed, I had him placed centrally before but I ran into masking issues which is why I solved the problem of where Matt was placed. However, I wasn't happy with how this shot visually looked so I decided to change it to an area that I had researched and analysed throughout the Theories and Techniques stage in my Contextual Research from a filled called Empathy, known as the Blue Hour.
Changed On: 12/4/24 - I decided to remove the Therapy scene as I, and all the others on set, felt it was really boring and didn't capture much emotional impact. We all agreed that after 45 seconds to a minute of watching we didn't want to continue as it ruins the pacing of the film. So, we went back that night and reshot a basic emotional conversation between them two which I feel builds more emotional tension, than the therapy scene did, towards the end of the Acceptance.
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Behind the Scenes
Here is Behind the Scenes of ACCEPTANCE showcasing how I created it through pictures and videos of Production and Post-Production.
DAY ONE (8/4/24)
On Day One of Production, I filmed with my actors Lois Gardner and Dan Missing, and my crew member Charlie Hooks at Barn Mead. This began early day and went through till night time. We had to move location to College Road for the scene of them arguing in the kitchen as my Grandad became frustrated with the long period of time we spent in his house.
DAY TWO (10/4/24)
On Day Two of Production, I filmed with my actors Lois Gardner, Dan Missing, Mable Wright, Violet Wright, Michael Armstrong and Angie Armstrong and my crew members Charlie Hooks and Amy Curtis at Finchingfield. Then later on in the day at Hatfield Peverel Station. It was a very windy day and moody day so I was concerned about how the audio sound and the 'happy' flashbacks would look.
DAY THREE (11/04/24)
On Day Three of Production, I filmed at St Mary's Church with my main actors: Lois Gardner and Dan Missing plus all the extras. I also had along side me Charlie Hooks helping me out as part of the crew. We also found a room next to the church where we filmed the Doctor and Work scenes.
DAY FOUR (12/04/24)
On Day Four of Production, I filmed the scene where Dan is Running and the Therapy (Deleted Scene). I am joined by my actors: Dan Missing and Rebecca Florence and for the crew I am joined by Amy Curtis, Charlie Hooks, Kacy Croft and Alfie Blayney.
POST-PRODUCTION
16/4/24
18/4/24
Colour Grading
As Colour Grading is one of my specialisms this year, I decided to showcase the progression of my footage, showing how it looked before and after it was Colour Graded. I have already added a Colour Space Transform node in the 'Before' footage, as showing the progression when it is a flat image is pointless as it all looks the same.
BEFORE
AFTER
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